Invite me in and ask me question, and im boud to fallow jumping madly threw the double doors. Alright if you really want my opnion... which most ppl dont please reply to this comment, Im really a kind person at heart, just not in my mind. If you want help from ameture to ameture... yes i know i can't spell. Than please let it commence

ok i couldn't resist... the one main thing that has always been pounded into poetry is imagery. DAMN IT MAKE ME SEE WHAT YOU FEEL, no im not yelling at you just my cat. see now i got you picturing some crazed lunatic yelling at their cat ! Imagery my dear Watson Imagery! go google John Dunces poem "the Flea" (check my spelling)you may or may not like it but it's good for imagery and you will see what i mean. Oh by the way the reason im saying this... from the poem I have no idea what you want me to feel. Make me see what you see make me feel what you feel. and not just me by the way all your readers want to feel the same way.

Rant over
WAVERING MIND

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Kind of a bitter sweet forbidden pleasure, Thus is life and love.

May i find my way.

Who am i to critique your work, i'll give an opinion hope it doesn't sound like dribble ; )

alrighty lol. confusing comment but, i think i know what you mean and from now on ill try to work on that. like i said though i have absolutely no idea what im doing. thank you though for the lovely critique and hilarious rant. i think i ll stick to pencil portraits.

IM glad your enjoying this. It makes all the more fun. Any more questions just ask. But im not going to say much more untill you get a grand handel on IMagery otherwise it all sounds the same to me, and i hate repating myself, like i really hate repeating myself. So just remember that and all will be good because i hate to repeat myself.

Repeating again i hate to repeat myself
WAVERING MIND

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Kind of a bitter sweet forbidden pleasure, Thus is life and love.

May i find my way.

Who am i to critique your work, i'll give an opinion hope it doesn't sound like dribble ; )

haha alrighty. btw i hate repeating myself too.

very thought provoking ^^
It wasnt too long, or too short, and i enjoyed reading it. good job

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*~cherry*
bob ownz yo ass, biatch
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thanks.

very nice! love what it makes you think about.

thanks